Tuesday, April 24, 2012

Wrecked hearts..

Rain pour bliss
Your hackneyed ardours
Have wrecked hearts


Attempt to put two emotions. Both of them longing for bliss. First one, gazing at the rain Gods for a downpour after a prolonged zeal of Sun, which has resulted in dried-up crops, greenless farms. Second one, a lover who is unable to convey his/her feelings and is just hoping that the feelings become mutual!

This Haiku is written for The Heights Of Haiku - April 2012. The prompt for today is Bliss.

21 comments:

  1. Both emotions are perfectly expressed, very difficult creation done perfectly.

    ReplyDelete
  2. You have done it very well.. good one..

    ReplyDelete
  3. Oh, I really like the powerful emotion in this haiku.

    ReplyDelete
  4. very beautifuly penned :)and do off the word verification ..thanks :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Yeah I did that, sorry, wasn't aware of it before.

      Delete
  5. well written ~ powerful ! ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^

    ReplyDelete
  6. 'Hackneyed ardours' - intense!!! Very beautiful.. :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I used both of them for the first time, thanks for appreciation!

      Delete
  7. Haiku expressing emotions powerfully...loved it

    ReplyDelete
  8. I can relate to your haiku in its very sense

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Not sure of the context you are relating, even I sort of had these moments!

      Delete
  9. Just a request...please turn off verification code to comment, It will be easy to post a comment :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Sure, I did it now, wasn't aware of it, Sorry.

      Delete

Thank you for leaving a kind word at each offering,
it is in this generosity that a true sense of
belonging is born. [Lines from Rebecca's blogpost]