Saturday, May 5, 2012

Giant wheel..

Philospoher's Stone
Image-by Admin,@Wonder la, Bengaluru.





Clock ticks eight
Strolling under moon
For your glimpse

For your glimpse
Heart skips a beat- in
Giant wheel

Giant wheel
Eyes meet to follow arc
Ups and downs








 Attempt to use Giant wheel as a metaphor for 'love'. It takes a full circle. There are moments where it skips our heartbeats. A image also being depicted here- A boy sitting in the wheel coincidently looks into a girl standing down and end up living ups and downs of life!


This Haiku is written for Haiku Heights. The prompt for this week is Hour.
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25 comments:

  1. PranitaMay 5, 2012 at 12:04 AM

    Beautiful use of giant wheel for love!!!
    I 'giant-wheel'd it!!!! ;)

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    1. Jaideep RaoMay 5, 2012 at 12:18 AM

      Hey thanks, took your advice to write sets of Haiku for the first time :)

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    2. PranitaMay 5, 2012 at 12:32 AM

      I noticed ! :) And it's really good.. looking forward for more...

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  2. Ramesh SoodMay 5, 2012 at 11:54 AM

    Sets of haiku..I am happy to see this trend picking up..well done.. RS:)

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  3. ChèvrefeuilleMay 5, 2012 at 3:57 PM

    Nice cascading haiku. Loved reading this one. I too am glad to see this form used by others.

    Namaste

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    1. Jaideep RaoMay 6, 2012 at 8:16 PM

      Namaste, yeah, i'll try writing in this form :)

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  4. GraceMay 5, 2012 at 4:45 PM

    I like the metaphor and wheel and arcs are excellent ~

    Nice cascading form ~

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  5. PattiKenMay 5, 2012 at 5:07 PM

    Very nice. The giant wheel is a good metaphor.

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    1. Jaideep RaoMay 6, 2012 at 8:18 PM

      yay, was inspired when I sat in it last week!

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  6. carol l mckennaMay 5, 2012 at 6:09 PM

    Lovely cascading haiku and insightful message of life and love ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  7. AnonymousMay 6, 2012 at 2:14 AM

    does the heart skip a beat because of the fear of heights or because of who the person is with?


    spring haiku and tanka

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  8. Tarang SinhaMay 6, 2012 at 10:25 PM

    Really nice composition!

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  9. vivinfranceMay 7, 2012 at 3:06 AM

    A very clever interpretation of the prompt - you didn't even need to use the word!

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  10. SuzyMay 7, 2012 at 2:33 PM

    you took me on a giant wheel journey. nicely done.

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  11. AnonymousMay 7, 2012 at 4:18 PM

    Nice cascading form. Very well crafted.

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  12. AnonymousMay 9, 2012 at 3:56 AM

    Great choice for your cascading Haiku ... nicely done!!
    Bewitching Hour

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